vibrant, free
enjoying, flourishing, sparkling
Time is running out
ticking, haunting, frightening
certain, inescapable
Death
I am quite satisfied with this poem. I think the topic of Life & Death works well with the strict symmetrical order of the poem.
I tried to change the second to last line, because I think “inescapable” is too long a word and does not really fit the flow, but as yet I couldn’t think of something better… So any suggestions are welcome ;-)
Maybe instead of looking for a shorter word for "inescapable" you could find a longer one for "sure" to create a better balance. How about "certain, inescapable"?
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